Hi there, i’ve been a silent reader for quite few pages now, and i must say that even if the story is quite interesting and full of surprises, we still lack the basis of the entire world. Not to mention the many infos on Grumps in cast page that have yet to be revealed in the story itself, or the cast page info for the 2 new team members still not here. Neither about what in hell and un-muse can be ? I think it should be time to fill us in more about magic types and species in FanFyria, don’t you think ? :)
Aside from that, i’d simply say “go on, that’s a great one”. :)
Love the funny interactions of the cast, Denny’s all-time innocence, Grumpie’s loner-type, Xavier the seducer and the mute imp somewhat help the way he can. Very promising storyline and script. ;)
@Darth Killer
Thank you for the feedback!
To be honest I didn`t expect things to drag THAT long before explanations begin to come. I think it is my own fault for trying to illustrate way too many actions. I plan to maybe publish this one day and I`ll definitely add few pages here and there to polish the scenes and the dialogue some.
I did mean to have Denny ask about the grumpy guy`s name at the end of Chapter 1 and he had to refuse answering but silly me thought I should keep every chapter to be up to 18 pages thus I cut that part out. Haha. I think to add it once I revisit the pages.
There is also that I update 2 pages per week and FanFyria 1 will most likely drag to at least 150 pages from what I predict at the moment and a lot of the answers will come along one by one. The grumpy guy`s name is especially one meant to be answered at the very end. Muses and un-muses is something to be answered in the next chapter as this one is close to finish.
And lastly… well Denny is really too excited to be in a fantasy world and just enjoys playing a hero. She doesn`t question things… yet. ^_^; and that doesn`t really help with answering questions ha ha.
Thank you again for the feedback!
Maybe 30 pages per chapter instead of 18 should have been better ? Because i don’t think cutting out illustrations from what you’ve published so far would be no good idea to me. You think you show us actions with too much details ? I think it’s the other way around, meaining that you could not have shown us less than what you did, and that the problem comes from the 18-pages limit. :P
But let’s keep going then. Maybe that’s just a feeling we get because the overall story is mearly starting, meaning that it will fix itself given enough time and pages. :D
Once again loving the art, Denny! And don’t worry, Darth, all will be revealed in time. Well, probably. At least I know she isn’t making up the setting as she goes along!
Haha yeah can assure you guys, everything is pre planned (minus some minor details around maybe) and I`m not making it up as I go. XD;;
I`ll break the 18 pages limit starting from chapter 3.
I`ll just have chapters take as long as I decide they need to be. Also I`ll be trying something different with the word balloons. Will ask for feedback for that as well when the time comes. :)
Many thanks for the comments!
PS.
Xavier is one of my favourite to draw in this and the next chapters. Love how he poses and his expressions in general are quite easy and natural to illustrate!
Plus, mysterious things keep people curious! XP
And I love how Zenth manages to convey so much just through his expressions and gestures. And he looks just so happy to be helpfully doing his good deeds. xP
I love all the breaking out of frames here, they work really well!
And yep, left. Totally.
thanks for reaching out. the fslarees five is a great concept and very positive. we are trying to fill that void of which you speak as well. we look forward to supporting your endeavors as we can.
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Hi there, i’ve been a silent reader for quite few pages now, and i must say that even if the story is quite interesting and full of surprises, we still lack the basis of the entire world. Not to mention the many infos on Grumps in cast page that have yet to be revealed in the story itself, or the cast page info for the 2 new team members still not here. Neither about what in hell and un-muse can be ? I think it should be time to fill us in more about magic types and species in FanFyria, don’t you think ? :)
Aside from that, i’d simply say “go on, that’s a great one”. :)
Love the funny interactions of the cast, Denny’s all-time innocence, Grumpie’s loner-type, Xavier the seducer and the mute imp somewhat help the way he can. Very promising storyline and script. ;)
@Darth Killer
Thank you for the feedback!
To be honest I didn`t expect things to drag THAT long before explanations begin to come. I think it is my own fault for trying to illustrate way too many actions. I plan to maybe publish this one day and I`ll definitely add few pages here and there to polish the scenes and the dialogue some.
I did mean to have Denny ask about the grumpy guy`s name at the end of Chapter 1 and he had to refuse answering but silly me thought I should keep every chapter to be up to 18 pages thus I cut that part out. Haha. I think to add it once I revisit the pages.
There is also that I update 2 pages per week and FanFyria 1 will most likely drag to at least 150 pages from what I predict at the moment and a lot of the answers will come along one by one. The grumpy guy`s name is especially one meant to be answered at the very end. Muses and un-muses is something to be answered in the next chapter as this one is close to finish.
And lastly… well Denny is really too excited to be in a fantasy world and just enjoys playing a hero. She doesn`t question things… yet. ^_^; and that doesn`t really help with answering questions ha ha.
Thank you again for the feedback!
Maybe 30 pages per chapter instead of 18 should have been better ? Because i don’t think cutting out illustrations from what you’ve published so far would be no good idea to me. You think you show us actions with too much details ? I think it’s the other way around, meaining that you could not have shown us less than what you did, and that the problem comes from the 18-pages limit. :P
But let’s keep going then. Maybe that’s just a feeling we get because the overall story is mearly starting, meaning that it will fix itself given enough time and pages. :D
Once again loving the art, Denny! And don’t worry, Darth, all will be revealed in time. Well, probably. At least I know she isn’t making up the setting as she goes along!
Haha yeah can assure you guys, everything is pre planned (minus some minor details around maybe) and I`m not making it up as I go. XD;;
I`ll break the 18 pages limit starting from chapter 3.
I`ll just have chapters take as long as I decide they need to be. Also I`ll be trying something different with the word balloons. Will ask for feedback for that as well when the time comes. :)
Many thanks for the comments!
PS.
Xavier is one of my favourite to draw in this and the next chapters. Love how he poses and his expressions in general are quite easy and natural to illustrate!
Plus, mysterious things keep people curious! XP
And I love how Zenth manages to convey so much just through his expressions and gestures. And he looks just so happy to be helpfully doing his good deeds. xP
I love all the breaking out of frames here, they work really well!
And yep, left. Totally.
thanks for reaching out. the fslarees five is a great concept and very positive. we are trying to fill that void of which you speak as well. we look forward to supporting your endeavors as we can.